aniruddha pathak

55 words or less: Deep love

In 55 words or less on September 22, 2009 at 11:19

How he loved to wake up at night and admire her sleep.

She looked beautiful, like an angel in her white gown.

The moonlight cast a beautiful shadow on her face.

Why didn’t she understand that now they could afford to have a child?

He wiped the knife clean and decided to call police.

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  1. uiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii………………..no no…..cldnt hve been so cruel…a bit kind approach wld hve lft me with a smile..:)

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  2. That was evil 😦

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  3. Why would he kill her over something like that? What gave you this idea? There’s opemthing really wrong here!! (or maybe, as a nice literature student…. I’d give in to willing suspension of disbelief and agree that what happened was the right thing to do… as long as she’s dead and doesn’t return to take revenge :P)

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  4. i meant.. something*

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  5. gosh thats brutal.. the reason seems absurd but then the guy could be a psycho and just needed an excuse to use that knife on his wife..

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  6. cruel cruel :-(…why did it have to end this way? 😀

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  7. Well from what I heard, Brad Pitt left Aniston cuz of the same reason (apart from falling for the Jolie charm), didn’t kill her though 😐 What a psychopath your little character!

    Damn Ani, destructive mind. Tsk tsk! 😛

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  8. *12 mulkon ki police tumhe dhoondh rahi hai, AP* 😀

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  9. lol..i LOVED it!!

    you have my kind of imagination!!! lol!!

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  10. What! he killed her just because they could not afford the chiild? what the hell..

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  11. Haww! And the title made me think it would be a love story 😐

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  12. SHEESH- that was very unkind- NO No happy endings please.

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  13. oh sorry missed it:D but nonethe less he is a pshycho! killed his wife just because she did not want a baby..finished a life just because she did not want to give birth to another life?

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  14. Ooooh! That was scary!

    Very very chilling – but beautifully executed 55er 🙂

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  15. a bloody come back eh 😀 just watched a Kill Bill vol1 scene and this one didn’t help 😛
    glad you are back though.. promise us you’ll write a happy one next time 😉

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  16. omg!! what an ending!!
    thats a complete about-turn from the kind of stories u usually write!

    good change 🙂 i liked it.
    so finally revealing ur true colours eh? experimenting with darkness n all 😉

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  17. @Ashwathy noooo the whole story 😀

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  18. Ooh…talk about morbid! 🙂 Well wriiten though…very visual…

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  19. whoa! The tennis elbow gone now?
    Better killing her than raping her for the child!

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  20. :O

    ..and u’r back witha bang!

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  21. Oh, wow… I definitely didn’t expect that ending! This was chilling in its starkness. Well done!

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  22. Wo..ow!

    I have only one word … ‘awesome!’

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  23. Gosh that was such a gruesome end!!

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  24. wowwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!! 🙂 u are getting better and better , isn’t it ??

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  25. Psycho write-ups are always interesting…so was this one..
    good writing…

    but bichari la ka maarla 😦

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  26. and hows you tennis
    elbow ?

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  27. whoa!!! what psychotic thoughts..keep them away ani_aset , shook me up have to tell you though..why dont you write a 55 er on dancing..some fiasco maybe

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  28. @megha i think you are right there 🙂

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  29. Wasn’t that too trivial a reason to have done something like that? Nice but spooky!

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  30. hey…welcome back…good to know you’re feeling better 🙂
    yeah, everyone has a dark side…wish everyone would limit to the pen like you…

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  31. A bit dark but quite real 🙂

    tnxx for the encouragement in my blog!
    TC
    Keshii.

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  32. You have been awarded!

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  33. The perfect concluding line – brief, direct and jolting.

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  34. After a long time I am here. it went out of my mind after I read your post of you taking a break.
    why he had to do something for such a small thing. talking helps isnt it.that was a cruel..if he loved her so much.

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  35. WOW! This was soooooo evil!! I Loved It :D! and decided to follow you provided you continue such posts 😉

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  36. WOW! This was soooooo evil!! I Loved It :D! and will blog roll you, provided you continue such posts 😉

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  37. he he he ok now it shud work!!! There was a typo error. 😀

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  38. you slit my heart! OUCH!

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  39. Oooo that was dark and evil!

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  40. ouch, that was dangerously in love. 😛

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  41. Ow wow! Did not see that coming! Dark and troubling…But so well written!

    Blog hopped here and loved your 55 word series 🙂

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  42. this was spooky.. can someone do this just to have a child… scary….

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  43. Whoa…evil story 😛

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