She was now panting as she rushed to reach home.
His foot steps and evil laughter haunted her.
It was supposed to be just a morning walk.
That day she had decided to give up on jogging.
“Where were you? Come in. We are about to sing the National Anthem”
oh my… i’m speechless…!!
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nahi nahi kuch bolo ash 🙂
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what else can i say but that ur 55-er is (as usual) mind blowing 🙂
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😀 you are nice to say that ash..thanks :)..btw where are you hiding these days??
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This is such a unique prompt… 55 words or less? Wow, you did a great job with such a small space! I could feel her heart beating (and think my own sped up with her!).
(popping over from The Self Love Project)
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Thanks april belle :)..your comments are sweet
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Apt for the season 🙂
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i guess so meira 🙂 thanks.
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WOW…could feel the pang. Are we just celebrating for the sake of it ? Right outside the crime is happening without fear or conscience.
Nice poem.
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yea megha that was the essence which needed to be captured here ..thanks 🙂
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Nice thought…glad that you are taking such issues that we ignore and just move on…btw happy independence day:-)
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happy independence day to you too manisha 🙂
This issue boils me over and over again
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Wow…That was so poignant…and you managed that in just 5 lines….Kudos.
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I’m glad you liked it choco 🙂
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nice write up…I like the concept.&.i like the way ur page looks.. 🙂
Thanks for dropping by.
Cheers!
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hey thanks Veda 🙂
Welcome to the blog
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Good one.
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thank you solio 🙂
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Succinct and bang on the spot!
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thanks tuliiiip..my blog missed you…me too 😀
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Loved it!
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thanks prerna :)..i’m glad you liked it
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that was scary…. 😛
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not to be scared ria..time to raise voice against this evil
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Irony of life. and you have depicted this so well. Congrats 🙂
have a nice 15th of august 🙂
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hey thanks shruthi..happy independence day to you too
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thanks. but I have a deadline, so gonna work on 15th 😦 once again irony 😛
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Really good one..
brilliant!
you managed to capture a brutal reality in a few words…
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i’m glad you liked it indyeah :)..thanks
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@shruthi uh oh hope you finish early atleast 🙂 take care
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nice writing..i like this prompt..
happy independency day….
enjoy!
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thanks shradha 🙂
happy independence day to you too
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You seem to be on a blogathon here
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twas just because of nablopomo 🙂
Welcome to the blog pesto sauce
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So so brilliant!
This is exactly what I mean in my latest post. What good is freedom when things like this are happening?
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Hey thanks muchos neha 🙂
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Wow !!
I dunno how you guys do it yaar ! Putting so much within so less !!
The concept – the context – the words – he lucidity of it all astounds me everytime I read a 55 like this.
Wonderlicious !!
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M privileged with cinderellas visit to the blog 😀
Welcome!! and thanks so much for a sweet comment..cya around 🙂
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Sounds like a quick stroll around Rashtrapati Bhavan before one finally settles in on the celebrations 😛
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bang on atrisa…there is so much still to be done before one starts celebrating 🙂
Welcome to the blog
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And we call ourselves independent! Nice one, so short yet conveyed the msg perfectly 🙂
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thanks kanupriya 🙂
that is what it intended to bring out, “are we really independent”?
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anyway belated Independence day wishes!
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same to you daniel
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That hit below the belt. I really wish you had also added a tight slap in the end to signify that women have come a long way since Independence. We are not there yet, but we are definitely no longer simpering fools.
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@aparna: what i wrote is about things as they are today. I myself want the things to change sooner for good.
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[…] 55 words or less independence […]
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[…] 55 words or less independence […]
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Sigh! Where is the freedom 😦
Here from Avant Garde list .. superb!
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@swaram: gawd have heard nice things about you from other bloggers 🙂 nice to see you here..see ya arnd 🙂
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[…] 1. Best short story post: https://silentlyexpress.wordpress.com/2009/08/12/55-words-or-less-independence/ […]
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Good one!
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@priti: thanks 🙂 i’m glad you liked it
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Few but great words. Loved them to the core. vivid. very.
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@riddhi: thanks for the appreciation and welcome to my blog
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