aniruddha pathak

55 Words or Less: Independence

In 55 words or less on August 12, 2009 at 15:46

She was now panting as she rushed to reach home.

His foot steps and evil laughter haunted her.

It was supposed to be just a morning walk.

That day she had decided to give up on jogging.

“Where were you? Come in. We are about to sing the National Anthem”

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  1. oh my… i’m speechless…!!

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  2. 😀 you are nice to say that ash..thanks :)..btw where are you hiding these days??

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  3. This is such a unique prompt… 55 words or less? Wow, you did a great job with such a small space! I could feel her heart beating (and think my own sped up with her!).

    (popping over from The Self Love Project)

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  4. Apt for the season 🙂

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  5. WOW…could feel the pang. Are we just celebrating for the sake of it ? Right outside the crime is happening without fear or conscience.

    Nice poem.

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  6. Nice thought…glad that you are taking such issues that we ignore and just move on…btw happy independence day:-)

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  7. Wow…That was so poignant…and you managed that in just 5 lines….Kudos.

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  8. nice write up…I like the concept.&.i like the way ur page looks.. 🙂

    Thanks for dropping by.
    Cheers!

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  9. Succinct and bang on the spot!

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  10. that was scary…. 😛

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  11. Irony of life. and you have depicted this so well. Congrats 🙂
    have a nice 15th of august 🙂

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  12. Really good one..
    brilliant!
    you managed to capture a brutal reality in a few words…

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  13. @shruthi uh oh hope you finish early atleast 🙂 take care

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  14. nice writing..i like this prompt..

    happy independency day….

    enjoy!

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  15. You seem to be on a blogathon here

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  16. So so brilliant!
    This is exactly what I mean in my latest post. What good is freedom when things like this are happening?

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  17. Wow !!
    I dunno how you guys do it yaar ! Putting so much within so less !!
    The concept – the context – the words – he lucidity of it all astounds me everytime I read a 55 like this.
    Wonderlicious !!

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  18. Sounds like a quick stroll around Rashtrapati Bhavan before one finally settles in on the celebrations 😛

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  19. And we call ourselves independent! Nice one, so short yet conveyed the msg perfectly 🙂

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  20. anyway belated Independence day wishes!

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  21. That hit below the belt. I really wish you had also added a tight slap in the end to signify that women have come a long way since Independence. We are not there yet, but we are definitely no longer simpering fools.

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  22. […] 55 words or less independence […]

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  23. Sigh! Where is the freedom 😦

    Here from Avant Garde list .. superb!

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  24. Few but great words. Loved them to the core. vivid. very.

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